thought i'd show you one that came back from the gallery unsold. it was painted plein air near Marshallberg halfway between Beaufort and Cedar Island Ferry, near Harkers Island. i really liked the scene and the painting was loose and colorful. when i got it back i decided on seeing if i could do something with it.
the first thing that hit me with the painting (and its lack of selling power) was it really didnt have a focal point. thats like having a story but its not about anything. no matter how well you tell the story its still about nothing and is a lousy story. so i know i need to do something about that. i'll put a boat in the water, darken the shadow area behind the white bow and voila! a focal point.
next the weeds on the right would be in shadow and i have em too light in the original, so i'll darken that and the baseline of the weeds all the way around, again adding more form and complexity to the painting (if only in a small way). the sky on the top right is too light in value so i'll drop that about 1/2 value step and make it more blue. the tree sun shapes look to fragmented so i'll drop the value and connect em. then add highlited areas to those shapes. that will give them more form. darkened the values of the tree shadow shapes to make the tree pop out away from the background more.
i stop before i mess the thing up!
What do you think? better?